tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post5732779515479087483..comments2023-11-03T05:59:46.763-04:00Comments on Keeping Secrets: Red CarKarenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comBlogger31125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-77056958604753304182010-02-10T07:51:02.296-05:002010-02-10T07:51:02.296-05:00the cops would come along and move the cars out as...the cops would come along and move the cars out as we fired 'em up and go to the next one down the road repeating it all over again.<br /><br /><br /><a href="http://www.workfromhomeindia.biz" rel="nofollow"> Work from home India </a>prashanthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04583385332262124749noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-65299456065220713982010-02-04T09:57:46.080-05:002010-02-04T09:57:46.080-05:00This feels ominous to me. I think my blood pressu...This feels ominous to me. I think my blood pressure just rose.<br /><br />Funny how those flashing lights have that effect on me...Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-77167345225457976852010-01-31T10:57:47.450-05:002010-01-31T10:57:47.450-05:00Calli - Thank you. Coming from a visual artist, I ...Calli - Thank you. Coming from a visual artist, I appreciate the comment on colors - for you know that they mean more than they are.Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-84467006279356367712010-01-30T22:00:52.067-05:002010-01-30T22:00:52.067-05:00Oh this is so different in such a good way, Karen....Oh this is so different in such a good way, Karen. Unique. And, I too felt the colours meant more than just being colours. <br /><br />Your writing has become so spellbinding of late. I love it!Callihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00354988534434872490noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-86179012434220748532010-01-30T18:55:16.952-05:002010-01-30T18:55:16.952-05:00Ghost - You could not have given me a better gift ...Ghost - You could not have given me a better gift than this. The music and visuals are breathtakingly beautiful, and dare I say...haunting? You've caused me to go in search of more, and if you haven't seen it, you might like this: http://salazarstudios.wordpress.com<br /><br />I'm enchanted. Thank you!!!Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-48329958551802737702010-01-30T18:37:52.730-05:002010-01-30T18:37:52.730-05:00Belle of Amherst...<a href="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fjeKrzrjCuc" rel="nofollow">Belle of Amherst...</a>Ghost Dansinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15216056025402469120noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-41954173763190515172010-01-30T13:27:38.519-05:002010-01-30T13:27:38.519-05:00joaquin - Isn't it interesting how our own per...joaquin - Isn't it interesting how our own personal histories inform our reading? Someone mentioned this as an acid trip; someone else as the scene of an accident. Truth is, it's whatever the reader thinks it is - even a happy, carefree youth spent at the drive-in! I'm so glad you read this with happiness!<br /><br />Moira - Thanks so much for stopping by and commenting!<br /><br />watercats - Glad this red car was running! Thanks for your comments.<br /><br />Argent - Thank you!Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-53938246419353049242010-01-30T12:05:08.687-05:002010-01-30T12:05:08.687-05:00Delicious repetition of the colours and, like the ...Delicious repetition of the colours and, like the other have said, terrific feeling of being just off-balance. great stuff!Argenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10532506690426639326noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-74862274894249782222010-01-30T06:33:19.163-05:002010-01-30T06:33:19.163-05:00I loved the place this poem took me and your way o...I loved the place this poem took me and your way of writing is quietly enthrawling :-)Batteson.Indhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10846214578565824955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-28163003035504911592010-01-30T06:01:03.438-05:002010-01-30T06:01:03.438-05:00This poem IS a neon light, I love it!This poem IS a neon light, I love it!Moirahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03248425760199196965noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-18363149005929569582010-01-29T21:15:43.823-05:002010-01-29T21:15:43.823-05:00it may be because a (long gone) bob's big boy ...it may be because a (long gone) bob's big boy figured heavily into my teen years, or because i think having a big boy combo & a shake at the old bob's in burbank belongs on anyone's bucket list, but my reading of this was rigged. by happiness.<br /><br />it just felt like a wonderful memory, dizzy and joyful, when you remember thinking you'd always remember it - a small moment - lights and laughter and a diner parking lot. <br /><br />i also love that you titled it "red car" - after how you prefer to think of it rather than how it really was. i think we all do that with memories sometimes.joaquin carvelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03193680725157157864noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-25128275056014626522010-01-29T16:01:51.975-05:002010-01-29T16:01:51.975-05:00Sarah - Thank you for your comment on form. You al...Sarah - Thank you for your comment on form. You always seem to understand just what I was going for. Your comments are too kind, as usual, but I really do appreciate the specific feedback. <br /><br />Dave - Thank you, Dave!Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-60948901245469701512010-01-29T06:15:51.171-05:002010-01-29T06:15:51.171-05:00I agree with Titus. The repetitions were very effe...I agree with Titus. The repetitions were very effective. A strong poem on many fronts, though.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-60814881671798084602010-01-28T23:13:16.862-05:002010-01-28T23:13:16.862-05:00Karen, this is amazing!! I just love your reach h...Karen, this is amazing!! I just love your reach here, and the emotional landscape of memory you've painted. No, not landscape--it's cinematic. Makes me think of David Lynch, or someone similarly surreal and dark. Everything's too hyper-saturated. And with so many shifts, it can be hard to absorb what's really happening...<br /><br />I love the way your mind works. You are a master of matching form with meaning. I've seen that countless times, but with this one, you've really created an <i>experience</i> for us. You let us live the moment, layered in memory as it is. And what could any of us do better as a writer?Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-16651923826229882562010-01-28T20:26:07.095-05:002010-01-28T20:26:07.095-05:00Cat - Thanks! I'm glad you felt that.
swiss -...Cat - Thanks! I'm glad you felt that.<br /><br />swiss - I think you have made a very good point about poetry. I often don't want to know the backstory. Poetry is about interpretation and making it one's own. <br /><br />joe - That's what I like - a commitment that's not a commitment! ;-) I haven't tried a ghazal yet. Maybe I will.<br /><br />Pure Fiction - Welcome, and thanks for stopping by and commenting. I enjoyed your pink poem!<br /><br />Dianne - You make a good point about the way we process reality - with an inner dialogue that never ends. Thanks for your comments.<br /><br />Titus - Thanks, Joanne.Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-4468927124486122722010-01-28T17:47:01.290-05:002010-01-28T17:47:01.290-05:00I really liked this. The repetitions are so effec...I really liked this. The repetitions are so effective, and the whole strangeness of what's going on draws you in deep. So you wonder, and mind wander, and read it again. Memorable piece.Titushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16380213493011623153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-2561122561472896742010-01-28T11:31:47.239-05:002010-01-28T11:31:47.239-05:00OK good, I was confused a little as well, but it h...OK good, I was confused a little as well, but it has a mix of memory and stream of conciousness, which is how we experience really. Never completely concious of the moments without inner reflection and commmentary. Kinda like blogging, ya know?<br /><br />I especially liked the anchor to the poem with the repetition at the end. Very rhythmic and song-lyric worthy.Diannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18323454057921441274noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-21664110404628550852010-01-28T11:25:38.583-05:002010-01-28T11:25:38.583-05:00Ooooh - I really like this. It sounds like a first...Ooooh - I really like this. It sounds like a first date that might have gone wrong. There's something menacing about the way the colours play out.Pure Fictionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04265599089734430505noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-61522944996833525692010-01-28T11:24:48.484-05:002010-01-28T11:24:48.484-05:00Curious... I'm not quite sure what to make of ...Curious... I'm not quite sure what to make of it yet, will have to keep thinking. Also, this could grow into a wonderful ghazal, I feel like, with the repetition of the colors. But only you know the story behind it, methinks. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-21958746796509788612010-01-28T08:54:48.940-05:002010-01-28T08:54:48.940-05:00all this repetitions that aren't repetitions. ...all this repetitions that aren't repetitions. it's strangely hypnotic. and strange! i like that there's no certainty as to what's going on and that, even if there was, i possibly wouldn;t want to know!swisshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924594772578153947noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-1797274882181344622010-01-28T00:04:12.350-05:002010-01-28T00:04:12.350-05:00At first read it was kind of just a fun color wash...At first read it was kind of just a fun color wash, but on second read it felt very much like something was happening that involved cops or an ambulance and a sense of the surreal. Strange, but very effective!catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-90764132957626803352010-01-27T20:48:08.560-05:002010-01-27T20:48:08.560-05:00TWM - I love that this sparks those memories in yo...TWM - I love that this sparks those memories in you. We're of the same era, I know, and so I can picture that younger you revving the engine just enough to be sneer before you move to the next drive in! I love that picture.<br /><br />Chris - Yay! The confusion is deliberate. Thanks for letting me know I succeeded in that.<br /><br />jason - Oh, but they were the real ones!<br /><br />Kat - A bad trip in many senses. Yes.<br /><br />Willow - Curb service! Would people even know what that is today? Does Sonic still do that? <br /><br />Julie - Thank you for all of the comments on form. I appreciate your reading so closely and letting me know how the writing affects you. By the way, I think the Big Boy was stolen in my hometown. It was actually returned eventually. Of course, this prank might have been repeated in many places! Now, how could you hide the Big Boy?<br /><br />John - Thank you for your comments on atmosphere!<br /><br />Rick - Aw, shucks! What a nice thing to say! <br /><br />TFE - Thanks to you, my friend. Otherwise, this would just be filling up the crevices of my brain!Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-59234971439055000032010-01-27T20:27:14.515-05:002010-01-27T20:27:14.515-05:00Weird and wavy, surreal in an ethereal kind of dre...Weird and wavy, surreal in an ethereal kind of dreamy fashion. It's different and it's good and I likes it!Totalfeckineejithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05352708391465031655noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-88353860795975301792010-01-27T20:04:14.488-05:002010-01-27T20:04:14.488-05:00Karen- the problem for me is that you do this so w...Karen- the problem for me is that you do this so well that I am always mesmerized by the art of your pen and miss the subject matter. There is such a lovely subtlety to where you take us. A quiet blue car. ~rickRickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12466743523566419268noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5474566446391728432.post-86506301950294356102010-01-27T18:31:06.960-05:002010-01-27T18:31:06.960-05:00This is atmospheric in just the right way--leaves ...This is atmospheric in just the right way--leaves the questions open in the right way; & very satisfying word play with the colors. Well done!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15687192784861682991noreply@blogger.com