Thanks to Michael Rhyne for the title. Visit Magpie Tales for other takes on the photo prompt.
Sometimes I Try Too Hard
Solid prayers break
against the deep;
chances fall like manna
out of reach.
The salted sea settles
round my feet.
Sometimes, I try too hard,
as if this cold were not
seeping through the pillar
that is me,
as if some god were
there to span the breach.
Chances fall like manna... sometimes it really does look like there is all this good around us that we can't partake in. Fortunately, I CAN partake in your poetry!
ReplyDeleteoft times it is when we come to the end of our trying that we find that bridge you know...smile.s
DeleteThanks, Danabug! You say the nicest things!
DeleteBrian, you are so right, but knowing and doing are two different things!
Nice write....sometimes we do try too hard...
ReplyDeleteThanks, Ayala, for stopping by and for commenting.
DeleteThere is so much in this verse. It has the motion of the sea and the depth of some god.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful...I can really relate to this Karen...
ReplyDeleteYou have translated the sense experience very well.
ReplyDeleteThis one really resonates with me. Thanks.
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This "reply" thing is a lot of bother. I hope you don't mind that I respond to all here.
ReplyDeleteGnome - thank you for your encouraging comments. I always appreciate seeing you here!
Tess. - glAd to strike a note with you. Thanks for the great
prompts at Magpie Tales!
Trellisimo - thanks (and welcome here)!
Sue - thank you, and welcome!