Wednesday, November 21, 2012

She Wishes for a Light in Winter

Imaginary Gardens with Real Toads suggested we write a poem using the pattern in He Wishes for the Cloth of Heaven by William Butler Yeats. So, with great hesitation and profuse apologies to WB, here's my stumbling attempt.

If you don't or haven't visited IGRT, you should do so. The prompts are always interesting and challenging and the company is inspiring!

P.S. Isn't he gorgeous?


















She Wishes for a Light in Winter


Had I the glow of a winter moon,
The silvered blue of winter night,
The full or the half, the shrouded moon
That lights the night into half-night,
I would lead you through this forest deep:
But I, being blind, with darkness keep;
I stumbling lead into the deep.
Hold tightly, my love, for the forest keeps.




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18 comments:

  1. This is lovely specially the last line, the forest keeps ~ Sighs ~

    Great work on the form too ~

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  2. smiles...it is lovely...the desire to light the way but unable clinging tight together...i like...smiles.

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  3. Just beautiful, Karen! In my opinion, you have no apologies to offer to Yeats. (And yes, he IS handsome.)

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  4. Love the poem. Really lovely piece. Yeats sounded like he looked - even on crackly recordings.

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  5. Truly beautiful imagery you've created. No apologies to Yeats neated. At. All. Well done.

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  6. I love how this poem turned on the sixth line, Karen. Your word choice, particularly in the repetitions is immaculate. Thank you for your participation in our RT mini-challenge.

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  7. And how wonderful to have a love to hold tightly! This is just beautiful! WBY would be proud, no doubt!

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  8. Oh this is very beautiful. I especially love the last two lines. Fantastic tone and mood in this piece. And you aced the form.

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  9. Such a lovely write, especially the lastline--

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  10. Oh, this is exquisite! Lovely poem.

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  11. I like teh atmosphere you create in this - lovely poem.

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  12. This is a very beautiful poem... and yes, he is gorgeous! I love the Mary Oliver poem you have quoted and I like the title of your blog. I can so relate.

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  13. This is simultaneously lovely and melancholy. Your repetitions are effective, not contrived. Well done.

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  14. Be proud! The commitment to form is awesome, and the sound repetitions are nicely done.

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  15. I haven't read 'He wishes for the cloth in heaven' but am familiar with Yeats' style. And I love his poetry. So I cannot comment how well you followed whatever form you did follow, but ultimately, it was a pleasure to read your words. Keep it up. :)

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  16. You knocked it out of the park. Love it...definitely one to reread...beautiful.

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  17. Yeats is my great love in poetry — and I think you did a WONDERFUL job with this. prompt.

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