Saturday, January 8, 2011

Fast













FAST

Gravity pulls me
down, down;

I'm holding fast to the line.

My head is spinning
round, round;

I'm losing track of time.

The jester holds his mask
fast;

I'm looking like the fool.

My heart goes tumbling fast
past

the lord of this misrule.

12 comments:

  1. love the flow...

    what a dazzling imagery your words painted here.
    have a lovely weekend.

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  2. yeah... it does feel so.
    oh but how greatly you've written the words to explain what that is...

    brilliant!!!!

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  3. Dear Karen:
    I find extraordinary your work. I admire this kind of poetry for exploring in the mind and soul.
    Congratulations!
    Debrah Riddleton

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  4. I was really taken along with this. It works 100% for me. The Jester holds the mask - absolutely!

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  5. If it were a plane, it would be time to pull back on the stick.

    Too much descent too fast has a tendency to set up an interview with the ground.

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  6. K
    I felt the fall
    the dizziness
    and the landing
    no one handles words with more tenderness
    ~rick

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  7. The structure provided by the rhyme in this one is just brilliant. Perfectly realised - the "fast past" actually brings the reader down. What's the image? It's wonderful too.

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  8. Gravity is certainly doing its thing with my body these days! That pesky jester.

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  9. Definitely a ride and a grand one at that!
    Karen, your transformation here has been a wonderful thing to witness.

    Also, a lovely play on words.

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  10. Jingle - Thanks so much! I must join you at Jingle Poetry (if life quits interrupting my blog time)!

    Dulce - Thank you for the kind words. Let me know if you figure out how to slow things down...

    Debrah - Welcome to Keeping Secrets and thank you for your comment. Please come back!

    Dave - Glad it worked for you. It seems that everything is speeding up for me these days.

    Jason - I love the analogy -- and the warning.

    Rick - Thank you. I miss being able to comment on your work, but I respect and understand your decision.

    Mairi - Thank you so much! I don't remember where I found the image. I just checked to see that it wasn't copyrighted and used it. I should have acknowledged it, I suppose. Isn't it intriguing, though?

    Tess - Oh, me too! I try not to look!

    Calli - Thank you, thank you!

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  11. Nifty way of exploring the different meanings of the word, and definitely excellent rhythm. Finish the song. :)

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  12. Wonderful photo to go with the wise words.

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