Friday, October 18, 2013

Caves of Ice



 Caves of Ice

If I could make a cave of words,
Untangle skeins of thought
And shape a cool blue icy haven,
I would surround myself as in Merlin's day.
If I could fashion thought into a lake,
I would eschew the fires of life
For numbing ice, for solace in suspension.
If I could penetrate the deep with this,
And words alone protect me from my sin,
Then I would say let frost begin its holy work.
Turn burning springs of strife to caves of ice.



Hannah at Imaginary Gardens with Real Toads brought us this photo and a challenge to write about caves. Go to IGRT to dive inside other poetic caves.

14 comments:

  1. "I would eschew the fires of life
    For numbing ice, for solace in suspension."

    Fabulously put and so fun to say!

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  2. I specially like these lines"

    Then I would say let frost begin its holy work.
    Turn burning springs of strife to caves of ice.

    Lovely share, thank you ~

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  3. Margaret and Grace quoted the lines that really struck home with me. You have wrought an incredibly deep poem here, kiddo. Wowzers!

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  4. So beautiful..."turn burning springs of strife into caves of ice"

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  5. A respite from burning desires and heat.:)

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  6. This has the feel of a sonnet, with your progression of conditional statements and the conclusion at the end. I think it is a fabulous piece of poetry.

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  7. OwWooo! I love this. You can shape the cave of words. I go there in this cave of words, and then hesitate. And then read again. I want this ice and yet I am not ready for it.

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  8. Love, love love the last line!!!

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  9. I love your extended metaphor throughout...this is my favorite: " fashion thought into a lake," thank you for writing!!

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  10. "Unravel skeins of thought..." Wow, what a line... you found a personal connection to the image, and that's so wonderful to read. The comfort of ice vs. the burn of the world is a challenging concept, one upon which I will meditate tonight in ever-cooling Wisconsin. Thanks, Karen! Amy

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  11. "eschew the fires of life"..."solace in suspension"..."Turn burning springs of strife to caves of ice."
    This is a lovely write.
    K

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  12. Deep and a delight for the senses ....

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