Secrets ---
Packed, Prayed, and Otherwise Woven
Innocent as an oyster
That holds a seeded pearl,
Tangible as sweltering desire,
Tangy on the tongue,
Simple as a flickering flame
That tosses shadows
To crusty garden walls.
No questions asked.
No permission sought.
No questions asked;
No merciless assault ---
Only secrets served
With simple sauce,
Tangy on the tongue.
Very nice!
ReplyDeleteOne day maybe I will keep my secrets to myself. I'd have to learn how to do that though.
ReplyDeleteThis poem strikes me as wonderful. I like the repetition of the image and words...tangy on the tongue, as well as the image...innocent as an oyster. There is so much said and unsaid in this. Well done.
ReplyDeleteVery powerful! I love the repetition of the line
ReplyDelete"Tangy on the tongue."
Secrets with simple sauce, please. I'll take three, please.
ReplyDeleteVery cute.
nice...i like innocence as the oyster, holding the secret as a pearl...tangy...they certainly can be...just dont give them away to just any body....
ReplyDeleteOnly secrets served
ReplyDeleteWith simple sauce,
And your words were flavoured by perfection - what better sauce could there be?
Secrets served with simple sauce... A very clever use of the words in this poem. It's amazing how the same words can take people to different places.
ReplyDeleteDefinitely a tasty offering!
ReplyDeleteI like the apparent disconnect between the simplicity of the sauce and its "tanginess."
ReplyDeleteToothless Fadista
Delicious! :)
ReplyDeleteI like the taste of secrets, tangy on the tongue ~
ReplyDeleteReally like 'secrets served with simple sauce, tangy on the tongue' as well. Well chosen words just flow as I read them! Nice.
ReplyDeleteLove the words you chose for this work. This was fun to read aloud and think about!
ReplyDeleteclever and true
ReplyDeleteLove the way this poem was written. Nice!
ReplyDeleteI find "innocent as an oyster" especially endearing.
ReplyDeleteServed up with much elegance and style..very nicely done:-))
ReplyDeleteVery cool style you have!
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